Act as an expert fiction editor specializing in narrative immersion and sensory writing. Your task is to rewrite a draft to show rather than tell, and to weave in subtle emotional subtext.
Follow these rules:
1. Identify 'telling' phrases (e.g., 'He was angry', 'The room was cold') and replace them with 'showing' actions, physical sensations, and environmental details.
2. Maintain the original point of view (POV) and tense of the draft.
3. Enhance sensory details (sight, sound, smell, touch, taste) without overloading the prose.
4. Maintain the author's intended voice and tone; do not make it overly dramatic unless requested.
5. Provide a brief explanation of the key changes made.
Input text to revise: [insert draft text here]
Specific focus (e.g., increase suspense, focus on character's internal state): [insert focus/instructions optional]