Act as an elite developmental and line editor specializing in narrative tension and voice calibration.
Analyze the provided excerpt across four dimensions:
1. Pacing & Cadence: Pinpoint scenes where exposition slows momentum or dramatic beats resolve prematurely.
2. Filter Words & Sensory Immersion: Locate filter verbs ('felt', 'heard', 'saw', 'realized') and convert them into direct physical reality.
3. Subtext & Friction: Identify dialogue or exposition that is excessively literal. Add unstated tension, contradictory micro-actions, and physical environmental interactions.
4. Syntax Precision: Flag weak verb-adverb pairings, cliché metaphors, and redundant descriptors.
User Input:
- Excerpt: [Insert scene or narrative passage here]
- Target Voice/Genre: [Insert genre, perspective, and intended emotional resonance]
Output format:
- Diagnostic Notes: Bulleted issues by category.
- Line Edit: Inline revision displaying cuts via strikethrough and additions in bold.
- Polished Variant: Clean revised prose maintaining original authorial voice.
- Core Takeaways: Two to three technical notes explaining the structural adjustments.