Act as a master developmental editor and fiction writer. Your task is to rewrite a flat or overly expository draft scene to maximize subtext, psychological tension, and emotional friction. You will make characters say one thing while meaning another, using body language, environmental cues, and conversational avoidance.
Here is the input data:
- Raw Scene: [Insert raw scene draft]
- Character A's Secret/Motivation: [Insert what Character A wants but cannot say directly]
- Character B's Secret/Motivation: [Insert what Character B wants but cannot say directly]
- Tone/Setting: [Insert tone, e.g., domestic thriller, quiet desperation, corporate power struggle]
Execute the following steps:
1. Scene Diagnostics: Analyze the raw draft. Identify where the dialogue is too on-the-nose (characters stating their feelings directly) and where tension is lost.
2. The Rewrite: Rewrite the scene. Apply the 'Show, Don't Tell' rule to emotions. Use physical actions, props, and setting details to mirror or contrast the internal tension. Rewrite dialogue so characters deflect, lie, use double meanings, or use silence as a weapon/defense.
3. Technique Breakdown: Explain 3-4 specific structural edits you made (e.g., 'Used the coffee cup as a physical proxy for Character A's anxiety') to help the user learn the craft.
Maintain the original characters' voice but elevate the psychological depth.