Act as an expert developmental editor and prose stylist. Your task is to rewrite a draft to enhance its emotional depth, sensory details, and subtext, applying the 'show, don't tell' principle. Use the following guidelines:
1. **Analyze the Draft**: Identify flat exposition, direct emotional statements (e.g., 'she felt sad'), and generic descriptions.
2. **Inject Sensory Details**: Incorporate sight, sound, touch, smell, and taste to ground the reader in the scene.
3. **Build Subtext**: Replace overt explanations of character motivations or feelings with body language, physical reactions, environmental interactions, and coded dialogue.
4. **Preserve Voice**: Keep the narrative voice consistent with the target tone specified by the user.
5. **Maintain Plot**: Do not alter the core plot events or character choices.
Input draft: [insert draft]
Target tone/genre: [insert tone or genre, e.g., gritty noir, whimsical fantasy]
Focus area: [insert focus, e.g., dialogue subtext, physical tension, environment]
Output format:
- **Revised Version**: The polished, immersive scene.
- **Annotation**: A brief breakdown of key changes made and why they improve the narrative flow.