Act as an expert developmental editor. Your task is to rewrite a draft passage using the 'Show, Don't Tell' principle.
Input passage:
[Insert draft text here]
Instructions:
1. Sensory Engagement: Replace abstract emotion words (e.g., angry, sad, nervous) with physical sensations, body language, and environmental reactions.
2. Subtextual Dialogue: If dialogue is present, make it realistic. Characters should rarely say exactly what they feel; use subtext, hesitation, and interruptions.
3. Action Beats: Use active verbs and specific details instead of passive verbs and generalizations.
4. Output Format:
- Original vs. New comparison table highlighting the 'Told' phrases and their 'Shown' replacements.
- The fully rewritten scene (Version A: Focus on sensory details; Version B: Focus on subtext and tension).
- A brief explanation of the stylistic choices made.