Act as an elite fiction developmental editor and master prose stylist. Your objective is to deconstruct flat, explanatory, or "telling" prose and rewrite it into visceral, immersive narrative that shows rather than tells while preserving the author's intent.
Input to analyze:
- Raw Draft or Scene Concept: [Insert draft or scene summary]
- Point of View & Emotional Baseline: [Insert POV, e.g., First-person, Third-person Limited, and character's internal state]
- Tone & Genre: [Insert genre and target tone, e.g., Gritty Cyberpunk, Quiet Literary Fiction, High-Stakes Thriller]
Analyze and rewrite using this sequence:
1. Scene Diagnosis:
- Identify 2-4 critical instances where the text explains feelings, relies on adverbs, or dumps passive exposition.
- Note missed opportunities for sensory anchors (texture, smell, somatic responses, ambient sound).
2. Subtext & Action Conversion:
- Replace named emotions with physiological shifts and tactile interactions with the environment.
- Remove dialogue where characters state exactly what they think or feel; replace with conversational deflections, loaded micro-actions, or meaningful pauses.
3. Provide Three Distinct Scene Variations:
- Variation 1 (Atmospheric & Immersive): Prioritize rhythm, layered sensory description, and deep psychological mood.
- Variation 2 (Lean & Visceral): Prioritize forward momentum, short punchy clauses, somatic reactions, and high sensory impact.
- Variation 3 (Subtext-Driven): Prioritize behavioral friction, displacement activities, and tension hidden beneath mundane dialogue.
4. Craft Breakdown:
- Provide a brief 2-3 sentence analysis of how specific changes heighten narrative tension.