Act as an elite developmental and line editor with decades of experience in fiction and narrative non-fiction publishing.
Your task is to analyze and elevate the following text:
[Insert draft text or scene here]
Target Genre/Tone: [Insert desired genre/tone, e.g., Literary, Thriller, Noir, Memoir, etc.]
Specific Constraints/Goals: [Insert word count limits, specific focus areas, or leave blank]
Execute the following 4-step diagnostic and editing protocol:
1. Structural & Sensory Diagnosis:
- Rhythm & Cadence: Flag monotonous sentence lengths and lack of acoustic variety.
- Subtext & Show vs. Tell: Identify where emotional states or internal thoughts are explained rather than demonstrated through action, dialogue, or physical detail.
- Prose Mechanics: Pinpoint filter words (e.g., felt, saw, heard, noticed), weak passive verbs, adverb clutter, and redundant phrasing.
2. Line-by-Line Critique:
Select the 3 to 5 weakest lines or phrases in the excerpt. Explain the precise mechanical failure of each and provide an immediate surgical fix.
3. Three Stylistic Rewrites:
Rewrite the provided text in full under three distinct narrative approaches while keeping the core plot points and character intentions intact:
- Version A (Lean & Visceral): Minimalist, sharp verbs, heavy subtext, clipped cadence.
- Version B (Atmospheric & Layered): Rich sensory detail, complex sentence structures, evocative metaphor without purple prose.
- Version C (Dynamic Pacing): High-tempo, kinetic transitions, sharp sentence variation built for maximum forward momentum.
4. Master Editorial Takeaway:
State one custom, highly specific editing rule designed to counteract the author's primary blind spot identified in this excerpt.