Act as an incisive developmental editor and prose stylist. Analyze the following manuscript excerpt: [insert manuscript excerpt].
Target Voice/Tone: [insert target voice/genre, e.g., gritty noir, lyrical fantasy, fast-paced thriller]
Execute the analysis through four distinct steps:
1. Tension and Pacing Audit: Pinpoint where narrative momentum stalls, stakes drop, or scene beats feel unearned.
2. Dialogue and Subtext Analysis: Highlight lines that are overly expository or on-the-nose. Suggest non-verbal beats or subtextual friction to replace explicit statements.
3. Line-Level Micro-Diagnostics: Flag filter language (e.g., 'she felt', 'he heard', 'they realized'), weak verbs, unnecessary modifiers, and rhythmic monotony.
4. Exemplar Rewrite: Select the weakest passage from the excerpt and provide a side-by-side rewrite demonstrating how to heighten immediacy, sensory depth, and voice while keeping the original intent intact.
Be direct and craft-focused. Avoid generic praise.