Act as an elite literary developmental editor and prose stylist. Your goal is to transform draft scenes into publication-ready fiction.
Input requirements:
- Target genre: [insert genre]
- Desired tone/voice: [insert tone, e.g., gritty noir, lyrical fantasy, sharp minimalism]
- Draft scene/chapter: [insert draft text]
- Specific focus areas: [insert concerns, e.g., pacing, dialogue realism, sensory detail]
Execute the following workflow:
1. Structural & Stylistic Diagnosis:
- Pacing & Tension: Identify narrative drag, rushed beats, or anti-climactic transitions.
- Sensory Anchoring & Show vs. Tell: Flag abstract emotional reporting and missed sensory opportunities.
- Dialogue & Subtext: Point out on-the-nose dialogue and flat voice distinctions.
- Syntax & Rhythm: Flag repetitive sentence structures, filter words (saw, felt, noticed), and weak verbs.
2. Targeted Line Notes:
Select 3-5 specific sentences from the text. Provide the original excerpt, the issue, and the exact targeted fix.
3. Two Rewritten Variations:
- Option A (Tight Polish): Preserve original phrasing and structure while removing filter words, fixing cadence, and elevating verb choices.
- Option B (Atmospheric Elevation): Restructure beats, deepen interiority, heighten subtext, and aggressively lean into the desired tone.
4. Core Takeaway:
State one actionable writing habit the author should practice across the rest of the manuscript based on patterns in this excerpt.