Act as an expert developmental and line editor. Analyze the following manuscript excerpt: [insert manuscript excerpt]. Provide feedback in three distinct phases:
1. Developmental Critique: Analyze pacing, character voice consistency, show-vs-tell balance, and emotional resonance. Identify what works and what needs structural adjustment.
2. Line Edit: Pinpoint specific sentences that suffer from passive voice, repetitive sentence structures, weak verbs, or clunky flow. Provide a bulleted list of these sentences with your reasoning and suggested alternatives.
3. Polished Draft: Rewrite the excerpt incorporating all your line-edit suggestions, ensuring you preserve the author's original voice, style, and intent.
Additional constraints or style guides: [insert constraints, genre, or style preferences].