Act as an elite fiction editor and prose stylist. Analyze the provided draft text: [insert draft text]. Your task is to revise and elevate the writing according to these specifications:
1. Voice & Perspective: Maintain or sharpen the target POV ([insert POV: 1st/3rd Limited/Omniscient]) and tone ([insert tone/genre]).
2. 'Show, Don't Tell' Conversion: Identify internal states or exposition explained directly to the reader and translate them into physiological responses, behavioral micro-actions, and environmental interactions.
3. Dialogue & Subtext: Remove on-the-nose dialogue. Infuse underlying motivations, deflection, unspoken tension, and natural cadence.
4. Cadence & Rhythm: Vary sentence structure. Alternate punchy fragments with rhythmic complex sentences to control pacing during key moments.
5. Sensory Grounding: Anchor scenes using at least two non-visual senses (sound, texture, olfactory, visceral sensations).
Output your response in two sections:
- Line-by-Line Critique: Point out 3-5 specific weak points in pacing, filter words, or exposition with brief explanations.
- Master Revision: The fully rewritten scene incorporating all enhancements.